what sucks about my resume

JWeis's picture

Hey 64 Door Openers.

It's been awhile since I posted. I've been sorting through some personal issues. The kind of stuff that needs to get resolved before I commit my full attention to making someone else's company succeed.

Anyhow, I have two resumes. I tailor these for each job I apply for. The first is the very abbreviated version. The second says it all.

I would be grateful if you'd tell me what stands out as either "putrid" or "sweet".

abbreviated version

J L. Weis
512.695.3209 1308 Cloverleaf Drive, Austin, Texas 78723
jlweis@ymail.com http://www.linkedin.com/in/jweis

?Summary: 13 years experience in Marketing, Consulting and Information Technology. Led global teams of 100 employees. Managed $US 1.5M budgets. Led improvements exceeding $US 5M.

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

11/2008 - Small and Medium Sized Business Advisor, Principal of Wattmonkey.com,

• WattMonkey.com Conducted data analysis, market research and technological solutions for web application.  Authored business plan, financial proformas, comparative analysis and functional specifications. Pitched to venture capitalists, angel investors and bankers. 
• Small Medium Business Strategy Consulting for i.) Liferay.com, ii.) Wild Pitch Marketing (Jason Grilli MLB), iii.) Sonance Studios, iv.) Coldtowne Conservatory, v.) Sixgunlover Records, vi.) Apparation Skate

11/2008 - 2/2009: Business Analyst at Solar Community Network (contract)

• Extensive national research of best/worst practices of net-metering policies and interconnection standards. Targeted Texas analysis of ERCOT, Oncor, PUCT rules, processes and incentives for distributed renewable generation.
• Business process analysis and optimization.  

11/2007 - 09/2009: Global Partner Strategist Partner Program Office - Sun Microsystems Austin Texas

• Responsible for driving the Distributor's global contractual requirements, value add definition, and reward structure within regional sales teams and partner sales.
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1/2001 – 9/2009: Senior Operations Manager Field Marketing - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas

• WW Marketing Business Lead for internal Sun initiative integrate hundreds of disparate business systems to a single Oracle platform. Managed every aspect of project lifecycle in accordance to Oracle IT PLC.
• WW Strategic Marketing Manager for Channel Distribution Partners world wide.
• Siebel CRM for Lead Management Project Lead. Delivered ahead of schedule & under budget of $1.5M. Managed WW team of approximately 100 employees. Resulted in quantifiable, reliable and verifiable metrics of Marketing's contribution to Sales' opportunity funnel, over US$1B quarterly run rate.
• Executed and communicated meaningful analysis of GSS Field Marketing alignment and funding to Sun's top growth targets and GTM activities.
• Defined the significance of "Web 2.0" and created global target lists for WW Marketing.
• Project Manager for Sun Market Analytics Reporting Tool providing business intelligence for top and targeted accounts.
• Improved Sun's Extended Availability Program for OEMs resulting in major ($US 500K+) deals with Philips Medical, Invensys, Teradyne within first 6 months; Improved Canadian Lead Management Process resulting in $US 600K new sales; Core Business Lead for additional business projects which either deferred costs or increased revenues by $US4M; Managed direction, content, architecture and maintenance of Sun Microsystems' Global OEM websites. Provided technical solutions for Partner and Internal Training and Bootcamps.
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10/1997 - 1/2001: Production Manager/Senior Web Tech Specialist - washingtonpost.com Rosslyn, VA?
• Led Web Production for i.) 2000 Presidential Elections, ii.) Live Online (EPPY Awarded) and Entertainment channels, iii.) site wide registration and iv.) site-wide redesign (multiple iterations)

?DEGREES/CERTIFICATIONS/TRAINING

05/1995 - St. Edward's University US-TX-Austin, Bachelor's Degree - BA International Relations
05/2009 - Austin Community College US-TX  Austin, Institutional Certificate for Renewable Energy Technologies
12/2008 - North American Board of Certified Electrical Practitioners (NABCEP) PV Installation Certification
07/2003 - Facilitation Skills Class US-CA-Newark
06/2003 - CAP (Change Acceptance Process) Application Skills Class US-TX-Dallas
03/2003 - Six Sigma For Team Leaders
06/2001 - Organization Development Program - Georgetown University - US-DC-Washington
10/2000 - Managing People for Maximum Performance - Harvard University - J.F.K. School US-MA-Cambridge

SPECIALTIES:

• Six Sigma Analysis and Methodologies, VOC
• Process, Cost and Cycle-time Analysis and Improvement
• Change Acceptance Process & Facilitation
• Managing Teams for Maximum Effectiveness
• Marketing Lead Management
• Sales Opportunity Management
• eMarketing, Social Media, Social Networking, SEO/SEM, Web 2.0 Strategies

not abbreviated version

I haven't updated this one in a few months. I was told get rid of it because it was toooo much


J Laurence Weis
1308 Cloverleaf Drive, Austin, Texas 78723 512.695.3209
jlweis@ymail.com http://www.linkedin.com/in/jweis

Objective:

Find a professional opportunity that takes advantage of my 5 core strengths which include: i.) a great desire to learn and to continuously improve, ii.) a craving to know more, iii.) a great deal of stamina, iv.) the ability to find connections between seemingly disparate phenomena, v.) ability to make things happen by turning thoughts into action.  
?Summary:

13 years experience in Marketing, Consulting and Information Technology with proven success of delivering profitable projects that exceed customer requirements and driving business critical applications, programs and processes.??

Specialties:
• Six Sigma Analysis and Methodologies, VOC
• Renewable Energy Technologies (primarily PV)
• Process, Cost and Cycle-time Analysis and Improvement
• Customer Support
• Change Acceptance Process & Facilitation
• Managing Teams for Maximum Effectiveness
• Marketing Lead Management
• Sales Opportunity Management
• eMarketing, Social Media, Social Networking, SEO/SEM, Web 2.0 Strategies, Crowdsourcing

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

11/2008 - Present: Consultant

Small Medium Business Strategy Consulting 1. Liferay.com - provided recommendations to improve specific links within the prospect to order supply funnel; 2. Apparition Skateboards - provide business consultation and strategic marketing advice, 3. Sonance Studios - developing a strategy to grow company from 1 brick and mortor space to 10 over a two year period.

Resident at Coldtowne Conservatory - Over 50 hours of comedy improv training from folks that write for Stephen Colbert, MadTV, and SNL. Instructors are graduates of nationally known schools such as Second City and iO of Chicago.

WattMonkey.com (a web based utility application for residential customers) - Conducted comprehensive data analysis, market research and technological solutions for web application.  Authored business plan, financial proformas, comparative analysis and functional specifications.  Interviewed 100+ industry experts to validate the need for the service.  Made several pitches to venture capitalists, angel investors and bankers.  Application production on hold due to economic shortfall.

11/2008 - 2/2009: Business Analyst at Solar Community Network (contract)

Extensive national research of best/worst practices of net-metering policies and interconnection standards. Targeted analysis of ERCOT, Oncor, PUCT rules, processes and incentives for distributed renewable generation. on interconnection standards.  Investigation and analysis of policies and readiness of retail electric providers for metering, compensation and compensation to DRG sites within Oncor’s territory.  Business process analysis and optimization.  

11/2007 - 09/2009: Global Partner Strategist - Sun Microsystems

Responsible for developing overall strategies, processes, measurements, and compensation structure for Sun Partners with a focus on Channel Distribution Partners world wide. Responsible for driving the Distributor's global contractual requirements, value add definition, and reward structure within regional sales teams and partner sales.??

1/2005 – 11/2007: Field Marketing Senior Operations Business Analyst - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas??

Marketing Business Lead for an internal Sun initiative to migrate hundreds of disparate business systems to a single Oracle platform. Covered deliverables including business process flows, requirements documentation, bval cycles, and business impact analysis . Acquired strong knowledge of 1. Oracle IT PLC, 2. vertical and horizontal business processes and 3. various Oracle 11i applications in E-Business Suite including Marketing, Sales, TCA, iScripting, eMail Center, 1:1 Fulfillment and Trade Manager.??

Siebel CRM for Lead Management Project Leader. Led global, cross departmental team in an IT effort goaled to 1. prove Marketing's influence on Sales' pipeline and 2. to align Marketing's Lead Management processes and tools to Sales' Opportunity Management and Tool. Led every aspect of IT Project Phases including Concept, Plan, Develop/Integrate, System Test, Customer Acceptance, and Deploy. Managed multiple consultants IT functional analysts and business process analyst roles. Delivered ahead of schedule and under allocated budget of $1M.

??Executed and communicated meaningful analysis of GSS Field Marketing alignment and funding to Sun's top growth targets and GTM activities.??

7/2004 – 1/2005: Program Manager - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas

??Project Manager for Sun Market Analytics Reporting Tool (SMART) which launched in Dec '04. Responsible for every aspect of development and communications including maintainence of Enact project plan, Marketing Account Manager communications, Interaction with stakeholders, management of Sun IT resources assigned to project, system readiness, UAT and data gathering coordination. Developed and Delivered online training to SUMM and xMM community. Authored SMART User Guide and User Acceptance Test Specification. ??

7/2002-7/2004: Sun Sigma Project Manager - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas??

Contributed as core team participant in multiple Sigma projects including Product Change Notification Improvement, Partner Web Experience Improvement and Global Leads Sigma Projects. Globally, process improvements increased revenue by more than $US4M.??

Led two successful Six Sigma projects goaled to increase revenue/decrease costs based on critical to quality requirements defined by Sun's customers both internal and external. Projects spanned multiple organizations and teams consisted of 10-20 core team members. ??Led improvement of Sun's Extended Availability Program for OEMs goaled to increase uptake in program; Improvements resulted with closed deals with Philips Med, Invensys, Teradyne within first 6 months.??Led Improvement of Canada's Lead Management Process netting $US.6M??

1/2001 - 7/2002: OEM Web Editor - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas??

Responsible for direction, content, architecture and maintenance of Sun Microsystems' Global OEM websites – including http://sun.com/oem/, iForce OEM Partner Portal and intranet OEM websites. Advise customers in the development and implementation of web solutions. Communicate effectively with both technical and non technical individuals. Evangelize Sun web tools to both internal and external customers. Provide technical/web support for organizational bootcamps/trainings.??

10/1997 - 1/2001: Production Manager/Senior Web Tech Specialist - washingtonpost.com Rosslyn, VA

??Coordinate with teams and managers to maintain quality of work and monitor changes. Set standards for web style, assure quality and produce online content for breaking news. Provide consultation/expertise to product development teams during the creation or redevelopment of product. ??Participated in overall product prioritization, scheduling and management for projects in process. Responsible for production details, focused on the ability to identify, report or solve problems under tight deadlines.

Worked closely with editorial and technical staff, designers and photographers in the development of product or delivery of content.??Led Web Production during 2000 Presidential Elections; Led Production for rollouts of Live Online (EPPY Awarded) and Entertainment channels of washingtonpost.com; Led Production for site wide registration; creating logic for main registration page, login, update registration; Coded the redesign of the washingtonpost.com homepage (multiple iterations)??

5/1995 - 8/1997: Public Outreach Coordinator/Tour Project Road Manager - Greenpeace International Washington, DC

?Managed public outreach, budget and issues work for Washington, DC area. Supervised and supported Canvass manager, Field Managers and staff (size range 20-45 employees). Ensured goals of revenue expectations, pay percentage and sustained gifts were met.??Toured and collaborated with major musical productions such as Santana, The Allman Brothers, Matthew Sweet and Radiohead. Catalogued national list of volunteers while organizing national and local organizations to raise funds and awareness at concerts.??

DEGREES/CERTIFICATIONS/TRAINING

05/1995 - St. Edward's University US-TX-Austin, Bachelor's Degree - BA International Relations
05/2009 - Austin Community College US-TX  Austin, Institutional Certificate for Renewable Energy Technologies
12/2008 - North American Board of Certified Electrical Practitioners (NABCEP) Photovoltaic Installation Certification
07/2003 - Sun - Facilitation Skills Class US-CA-Newark
06/2003 - Sun - Sun CAP (Change Acceptance Process) Application Skills Class US-TX-Dallas
03/2003 - Sun - Sun Sigma For Team Leaders Part 2 - Analyze, Improve and Control Class US-CA-Newark
02/2003 - Sun - Sun Sigma For Team Leaders Part 1 - Define and Measure Class # 61559 US-CA-Newark
07/2002 - Sun - Java - Java Analysis and Design Using UML Class US-TX-Austin
04/2001 - Sun - Solaris 8 System Admin US-Texas-Dallas
06/2001 - Organization Development Program - Georgetown University - US-DC-Washington
10/2000 - Managing People for Maximum Performance - Harvard University - J.F.K. School US-MA-Cambridge
03/2000 - Java Programming for Programmers - Sun Educational Services US-VA-Rosslyn
01/2000 - Perl Programming, Learning Tree International US-MD-Rockville
04/1999 - Java, USDA Graduate School US-DC-Washington
10/1998 - Intro to SQL, USDA Graduate School US-DC-Washington

PROFESSIONAL RECOMMENDATIONS

(7 of 24 from http://www.linkedin.com/in/jweis):

“J is an intensely creative, driven person with a great sense of humor and a unique understanding of technology. He is an absolute joy to work with and an incredibly smart person. It's clear he has both a passion for life and for making things happen, and that makes him the kind of person you want to work with - whatever the project.” June 1, 2009: Amy Lemen , Owner, Chief Writing Officer , Writeous Words

“J has mostly used me as a sounding board for his new WattMonkey venture. Although this is his first venture on his own, I found him to be mature beyond his years. What is more important is his passion and enthusiasm for the vision and purpose of this venture. His ideas and financial plans were conservative and believable for the early stage of his planning. ” May 26, 2009: Bob Anderson , CFO , Zebra Imaging

“J Weis is brilliant, creative, committed, detail-oriented, very passionate and a complete professional. I've found him a wonder to work with, and I expect his current project - and any project he tackles - will be a huge success.” May 28, 2009: Jon Lebkowsky , Cofounder and Web Strategist , Social Web Strategies

“"Consensus Builder" is the phrase that comes to mind when describing J. He has this amazing quality of bringing diverse group of people for a common cause and then driving to a shared (re)solution. In addition, he has an amazing "can-do" attitude with a great sense of humor. It was a pleasure working with J.” February 18, 2008: Sanjay Moona , Distinguished Marketing Director - Offers & Online Marketing , Sun Microsystems

“J was the ideal business client. He worked closely my IBIS marketing team to implement Oracle 11i for Marketing and Telesales at Sun. He is an agile learner, a highly competent marketing strategist and a perfect project partner. He was tenacious in driving tasks and results, always delivered high-quality work in spite of demanding deadlines, and he negotiated stalemates with fairness and understanding. Very importantly,he was a calm and committed partner on a very demanding project.” February 7, 2008: Judith Dauphinais , Process Lead, Marketing & Telesales, IBIS Project , Sun Microsystems

“J is a young and very smart Marketing Strategist, and was a key team member to have on every project we have the opportunity to share.” January 15, 2008: André Echeverria , Latin America Project Leader and Black Belt (Six Sigma Methodology) , Sun Microsystems

“J is the guy you want on your team. Always professional, very considerate to other people's needs, and a great mediator/negotiator. He has the ability to break down and analyze seemingly impossible issues making them manageable and actionable. However, the most important asset is J's sense of humor. He always finds a fun and positive twist in even the most dire situations. He has the ability to lift up the spirit of his team members while getting the job done.” January 7, 2008: Stefan Van der steen , CRM Business Consultant , Sun Microsystems

“J Weis remains one of the five best people I have ever worked with. He is an excellent manager and leader of a team and is well respected by his colleagues and superiors. J has a wonderful,natural communication style that enables him to get more results than many of his peers. J is an outstanding leader, but more importantly he is an even better person.” November 11, 2007: Keith T. Tomatore , VP of Sales Development and Operations and Newsweek and Budget Travel , WPNI

Comments

csg2's picture

I think the thing that

I think the thing that stands out with the short resume is that it doesn't say what you accomplished. It says what you worked on. The second resume does this better. I think this is the part you should not cut to make the short resume.

This line is along the lines of what I mean:

3. Sonance Studios - developing a strategy to grow company from 1 brick and mortor space to 10 over a two year period.

This line can be better though. Did the strategy succeed? If so give this sentence more punch.

Planned succesful growth of a company from 1 to 10 outlets in 2 years.

(Brevity is the sole of wit says Shakespeare. If you can make it shorter and still convey your meaning, do so.)

Think of these lines as introductions to topics your interviewer will want to talk about. That is what they are. You don't need to explain everything on the resume. If they want to know more, they will ask.

As a last thing, in my line we are told to not put recomendations on the resume. They can be provided when the employer asks for them. This keeps recruiters from harassing your friends for other applicants to what could be your job. The exception is of course if the employer asks for them upfront.

HireThisStar's picture

Part of the "too much" on

Part of the "too much" on the longer version is pre-2000. I would drop the Greenpeace mention for that reason, as well as the fact that - rightly or wrongly - it might trip a negative political bell with a manager. (The average recruiter wouldn't even know Greenpeace from green peas, but would still focus on the overall length.) Ten years is a good length for a resume, as propounded by the people who want to sell you their books on resume writing.

I would also consolidate all the pre-2007 (or so) continuing education. That's actually an impressively diverse list from some good institutions, though, so maybe you could sum up with something like an attribute, such as:
"Continual, versatile self-improvement, as evidenced by XX hours per year of continuing education from Harvard, Georgetown, more." Then you could list just the most recent two or three courses in one-line detail.

Perhaps bring out more financial successes - granted that it doesn't seem to be your focus, it might tip you over the edge by describing more about "financial proformas." As CSG mentioned, tell the world more about "Led Improvement of Canada's Lead Management Process netting $US.6M" and "under allocated budget of $1M."

I suggest listing all your writing as a separate item, as you've done more than the average non-writer. Use sub-bullets perhaps, like:
"Prolific writer:
-business plans
-user guides
-test plans
- etc." That might hook the screening recruiter who's looking for specific items.

Agreed about recommenders' details, although you could perhaps synthesize some of the more interesting comments like this:
"Acclaimed as "passionate", "tenacious", and "agile", with "natural communication style" - excellent references available on request."

hth, and good luck!

Wayne C. Vermillion
Instructional Designer/Project Manager

nzook's picture

I know that whitespace is

I know that whitespace is hard online, but even your first resume' felt toooo long. Your resume' is your sales brochure. As I understand the position of business analyst, your half a salesman. If that's so, I would expect to be judged hard. You need bite.

You have (pick you number) seconds at the top of your resume' to convince a potential client to keep reading. Make it count.

JWeis's picture

I want to say, with witty

I want to say, with witty brevity, thanks.

You are very smart. It's nice to be in a "smart" community. EVEN SWEETER when the "smart" community members look out for one another.

JWeis's picture

resume fixes .:. Following

resume fixes .:.

Following are updates I made based on your influences. Updating resume has always been the optimal way to force concision.

BTW ... after making some of the changes, i realized that the advice offered by door64 community members is EXCELLENT general advice. If anything, read their "response" posts 1st.

J L. Weis
512.695.3209
1308 Cloverleaf Drive, Austin, Texas 78723
jlweis@ymail.com 
http://www.linkedin.com/in/jweis

?Summary: 8 years experience in marketing, consulting and information technology Led global teams of 100 employees. Managed $US1.5M budgets. Led improvements exceeding $US 5M. Prolific writer of business plans, user guides, use cases, flow diagrams, test plans and scenarios, marketing collateral for internal and external usage.

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

11/2008 - Small and Medium Sized Business Advisor, Principal of Wattmonkey.com

  • WattMonkey Conducted data analysis, market research and technological solutions for web application.  Authored business plan, financial proformas, comparative analysis and functional specifications. Pitched to venture capitalists, angel investors and bankers. 
  • Small Medium Business Strategy Consulting for i.) Liferay.com, ii.) Wild Pitch Marketing (Jason Grilli MLB), iii.) Sonance Studios, iv.) Coldtowne Conservatory, v.) Sixgunlover Records, vi.) Apparation Skateboards

11/2008 - 2/2009: Business Analyst at Solar Community Network (contract)

  • National research of best/worst practices of net-metering policies and interconnection standards. Targeted Texas analysis of ERCOT, Oncor, PUCT rules, processes and incentives for distributed renewable generation.

11/2007 - 09/2009: Global Partner Strategist Partner Program Office - Sun Microsystems Austin Texas

  • Responsible for driving the Distributor's global contractual requirements, value add definition, and reward structure within regional sales teams and partner sales.

?1/2001 – 9/2009: Senior Operations Manager Field Marketing - Sun Microsystems Austin, Texas

  • WW Marketing Business Lead for internal Sun initiative integrate hundreds of disparate business systems to a single Oracle platform. Managed every aspect of project lifecycle in accordance to Oracle IT PLC.
  • WW Strategic Marketing Manager for Channel Distribution Partners world wide.
  • Siebel CRM for Lead Management Project Lead. Delivered ahead of schedule & under budget of $1.5M. Managed WW team of approximately 100 employees. Resulted in quantifiable, reliable and verifiable metrics of Marketing's contribution to Sales' opportunity funnel, over US$1B quarterly run rate.
  • Executed and communicated meaningful analysis of GSS Field Marketing alignment and funding to Sun's top growth targets and GTM activities.
  • Defined the significance of "Web 2.0" and created global target lists for WW Marketing.
  • Project Manager for Sun Market Analytics Reporting Tool providing business intelligence for top and targeted accounts.
  • Improved Sun's Extended Availability Program for OEMs resulting in major ($US 500K+) deals with Philips Medical, Invensys, Teradyne within first 6 months; Improved Canadian Lead Management Process resulting in $US 600K new sales; Core Business Lead for additional business projects which either deferred costs or increased revenues by $US4M; Managed direction, content, architecture and maintenance of Sun Microsystems' Global OEM websites.

?10/1997 - 1/2001: Production Manager/Senior Web Tech Specialist - washingtonpost.com Rosslyn, VA?

  • Led Web Production for i.) 2000 Presidential Elections, ii.) Live Online (EPPY Awarded) and Entertainment channels, iii.) site wide registration and iv.) site-wide redesign (multiple iterations)

?DEGREES/CERTIFICATIONS/TRAINING

05/1995 - St. Edward's University US-TX-Austin, Bachelor's Degree - BA International Relations
12/2008 - North American Board of Certified Electrical Practitioners (NABCEP) PV Installation Certification
Continual, versatile self-improvement, as evidenced by 40+ hours per year of continuing education from Harvard, Georgetown, more.

HireThisStar's picture

Now we start on details, he

Now we start on details, he grimaced :-)

Bear in mind that Billy Shakespeare was the only good writer who never needed an editor! But since you asked for it, here 'tis, on my lunch break.

Punctuation:
Need a period after "technology" in first line to match the rest of that paragraph, unless you have other formatting for that opening phrase, such as bold, that doesn't appear here.

Need a colon or dash after "Wattmonkey", or better yet, drop that mention completely, as it's covered in your subheading.

Language:
Start the second bullet under Wattmonkey with a verb to match "Conducted..." in the first bullet item. Try "Consulted..." or "Researched and advised..."

Similarly, start the 11/2008 - 2/2009 line with something like "Designed and conducted national research..." (stay away from "Performed due diligence" because it's so vague outside legal or financial circles.)

Likewise, 11/2007 - 9/2009 needs a strong verb or two up front. How about "Designed and implemented...", because "Drove..." is vague to me. Perhaps try "Monitored (or 'Managed') worldwide distribution channels' global..."

"distributor" shouldn't be capitalized; further down, Sales and Marketing can be capitalized because at least they're defined departments.

Overall, lead with strong, easily understood verbs. Look at your last bullet under Sun: two great uses of "Improved" and "Managed", but then a non-verb title in the third item. Maybe use a synonym for one of the "Improved" mentions -"Enhanced" or "Expanded", maybe?

Drop "approximately" from team headcount, and indeed, from all resumes and correspondence completely, unless you're talking billions and billions; add numeric headcount for washingtonpost.com item.

:-)

Wayne C. Vermillion
Instructional Designer/Project Manager